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there's no way this the end right?

its so cute!!! >///<

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but does anyone realize that this is kinda.... um... how do i say it....

ok, its like this. on their first time, they were watching some av, and then shougo got erected, and satoshi just started to touch him.. at first it was normal until i read again and.... omg, when did they get into the bed and satoshi's naked too?! i was like "itsunomani?!"

then on their second time, in the music room, shougo gave satoshi a kiss reward, and then satoshi wanted more, and after that he started to touch him more (even gave him a finger) but then i read it once again, and i realize ...... where did shougo's pants go?? it didn't appear at all when satoshi gave shougo a finger (and then the scene just changed to satoshi's room). i mean, make it more logical. it doesn't make sense if the pants just disappear to thin air. at least draw the pants hanging on shougo's leg or maybe on the floor or something..... it'll be more logical. i also didn't see any trace of shougo's shoes. they just gone.

and last! on their third time. they were doing some lesson like usual, and then shougo confessed, and then they got hot n' heavy... i, once again, realize...... where did the study session go??

okay i know its not important, but i just want to point this out. no harm intended. but if sensei saw this, i hope sensei can make it into a constructive critique... or just some white noises

but yeah its a good story, it's so my taste, and i really really love it!! good job Anan Yukako-sensei!!