hi everyone. I need your honest opinion about my writing. I am aiming to be a self-published writer soon, and kinda feel a little scared right now because I don't have confidence in my skill. So please, if you could, give me your feedback. And do you think people would pay for my writing? Here's a sample of an original story I wrote inspired by the manga Hanayome-kun. Thank you for helping *nervous*nervous* Chapter 1 - Marriage Day"Arranged marriage at the age of 18. To someone I don't know and never met. So my family can be saved... how maidenly." He gave a mocking laugh as he fiddled with his white kimono. Then he thought he had gone insane for laughing at something not necessarily funny.Taking one last look at his bedroom, he quickly turned around and walked out.It was time to head for the Sekiya main house. He was going to marry into the Sekiya household as the bride. And became Sekiya Hajime's wife, a guy, who was the same age as him. As if that was not ridiculous enough, he was also going to be staying at the Sekiya house from now on like a proper wife, and had his name changed to Sekiya Yukihisa. Things like his gender being male was not a concern to them. It was appalling how conservative the Sekiya family still was considering this day and age. Still, a beggar like himself could never choose, he supposed.The car ride felt a little slower than normal, as if his father deliberately tried to postpone the inevitable. No matter, not like I am in a hurry to end my life as I know it, he thought to himself.The scenery outside passed by like they always do. He saw little old Aoba grandma walking away from the grocery store. There were two little boys chattering excitedly on the way home from kindergarten. A mother looking harassed by her upset little baby at the junction. Everyone was going about their normal lives outside.Nothing was normal inside the car though. At the back, sitting stiffly, Yukihisa fiddled with his robe again. He was wearing uchikake kimono, a long, white kimono women wear to their wedding, despite being a man, to be married off as a 'wife'. And he was still an 18-years-old high school student. It's a good thing they did not require him to wear the headdress women wear, but the pristine white flowery-patterned silk wrapped around his body was enough to make him feel like a woman. He felt suffocated and nauseated just thinking about it.In front of the car, mama who was usually sweet and cheerful, was now quiet as a mouse, shrunk in on herself like that, her head bowed low to hide her face, her hands gripping her handbag tightly. Dad was driving grimly, his movements stiff as his eyes locked to the windscreen the entire time. None of them looked back to him or tried to make small talks. It felt so much like going to grandma's funeral service he got a sense of dejavu.He knew this was all because mom and dad felt guilty about this. They were embarrassed of themselves, of their inability to protect him. No matter how much he convinced them otherwise, that he's doing this out of his own free will, they knew it was because they were backed into a corner. He was sacrificing himself so father's company could escape bankruptcy and his little brother and sister would never taste poverty. In the end, everyone felt the sting of helplessness eating at their flesh.The rest of the day passed by in a blur. The marriage service, the greetings of relatives, the small private feast, he just let himself drift through it all. He followed whatever instruction given by unknown voices, bowed his head and said the barest pleasantries each and every time someone approached. It seemed they were not expecting much of him either. Nothing registered deep in his mind but the fact that mama and dad left him here without a goodbye. Perhaps mama was crying and dad did not want him to see it so he dragged her out. Or maybe they did not have the heart to-"...hisa. Yukihisa. Yukihisa!""Uh. Yes?" He looked up to the one summoning him. It was Sekiya Hajime himself."It's time to retire. Every guest has left. Grandmother and other family members are also gone." He turned around to leave. "Follow me. I'll show you your room." His curt and precise words did not leave room for argument."Yes, Sekiya-sama."Sekiya Hajime whipped around so fast his clothes swirled sharply about him, nearly hitting a startled Yukihisa."What was that? Sekiya-sama? Are you making fun of me?""What? I... no. I just..." Yukihisa was at a loss for words. He did not get why Sekiya Hajime would feel that way."You realize that you are now Sekiya too? Should I call you Sekiya-sama? ""I'm not making fun of you! It's just how my family addresses your family. Why would I make fun of you? And it's not like you have said anything about calling out your given name. If you don't like it shouldn't you do something about it?" Great, a fight between newlyweds right after guests went home, Yukihisa thought grimly.“What kind of tone is that you're taking to your husband?!”“Well, you started it! You want me to be respectful? Why don't you start first?”Hajime walked forward and pulled on Yukihisa's pristine white uchikake kimono's collar roughly, jerking him forward. His anger was palpable in his eyes and face. Yukihisa stood his ground despite his heart jumping all over the place."You'll call me Hajime, and you'll listen to everything I said.” He hissed angrily in Yukihisa's face. “That's all the respect you're going to get, wife. Now, follow me!" Then he grabbed Yukihisa's wrist tightly and dragged him off deeper into the traditional Japanese house.“That hurt! Let go!” Yukihisa called out to the man in front of him, angered and humiliated at the treatment. “I said let go!” He tried to tug his wrist away, only to have Hajime tighten his grip in reprimand. It's going to bruise tomorrow, Yukihisa thought in disgust as he ceased his struggle and tried to hurry up, not feeling like keeping up the pointless fight. Yukihisa had no problem matching Hajime's pace, but the long winding corridors and his own heavy robe turned it into a struggle. Soon he was mind-cursing everyone who designed the sprawling house and his 'more layers than he cared to count' kimono and the tight obi around his chest that was cutting his breathing, but mostly he was cursing the abominable freight train that was Hajime."Starting tonight, this is your room. My room is next door." Hajime pointed down the hallway. We actually had our own private wing, Yukihisa noticed."There's a door that connects both our room in between. Don't worry, I am never going to open that door. You too, better not try to." He said with threatening tone, his eyes full of distrust.Yukihisa just glared back. He really was not feeling like talking now, as he was still huffing and puffing. Threats be damned, it's not like he would ever be tempted by this arrogant guy."Anything you want to ask?""Bathroom?" he huffed."End of the corridor." This time Hajime just gave a flick of his head down the hallway."Thanks. See ya." Without waiting for a reply Yukihisa swiftly opened the bedroom door and entered, sliding the door closed with a bang in Hajime's face. He did not even feel like caring that he was being rude to his spouse. He just wanted the day to be over.He waited a moment at the door, making sure that Hajime would not burst in with anger at his attitude. When nothing happened, he sighed with relief and walked away. Good thing we are not expected to sleep together. I might end up strangling him to death, Yukihisa predicted.
can Anyone help me to find yaoi manga, tge story is about a shy kouhai (junior) who in love with his senpai bu he cant tell him .. Pleasee hellppp meee ._.
Hi everyone, need some help finding a B.L. manga and I have been looking for days except that I only remember a scene. Thanks for all the help.Here is the scene,Guy A wakes up and doesn't know where he is, and he starts towards the sound/ smell of food.(I'm not sure that Guy B is making food I think he is???) On the way he peeks in few of the rooms, one of the rooms has bookcases filled with books and such. Another room is an exercising room. Guy A finds Guy B in the kitchen/ dining area. Guy A sits at the table and talks to Guy B. Guy B's cat comes out and starts to hack/ cough up a fur ball. Guy A thinks something is wrong with the cat. Guy B takes care of the fur ball and says something (similar to) " I thought so too, and I went to the veterinarian to make sure."Thanks
looking for a manga similar to tail of the moon, what I mean is that its an arrange marriage but the guy is opposed to it and has a lot of angst unmm.. preferaby its completed ok thanks
guuuuuuuys!!!!! what manga is this??? :))http://old.mangago.com/read-manga/aibou_no_jouken/mf/v01/c003/
I m searching a yaoi manga that goes something like thisThe uke work as a helper of a chef in brodcasting network and meet his past lover (who was also a chef) but the uke does not remember it (because of some surgery) and so those the lover( until some time) the uke also have a new lover itself and stick to him until the end of the story .Please help me find this I know my english suck but pleasee
Sounds a lot like this one:http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/koi_no_tsumeato/
Thank you so much!!!!
Looking for a yaoi manga where the uke ran away from the seme. When he returned to the seme's place he saw his old pet. I think it was a hamster with a heart shaped mark on his fur on his back. Then the seme came back home with someone and the runaway uke assumed that the seme and that 'someone' are together. The seme gave the runaway uke money but he got mad and left. That's all I can remember. Anyone knows what's the name of this manga? Thanks.
Thank you very much Agnes-san! I've been looking for this. Thanks again!
Looking for a naono bohra story about a man who is a vet that is in love with a retired cop who lost his leg saving the vet's life when he was younger. I think it was a one shot but I'm having a hard time finding the name. Can anyone help?
This one: http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/hajishirazu_na_yoru/an/hajishirazu-na-yoru-chapter-2.html
Please help i forgot the but i think mizukami shin, its about doctor that heal the inner of people i think thank you
Thank you agnes
uke in a kimono?? please :<
or any other genre with do, i just like to read any with kimono, thanks
http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/i_want_to_become_your_bird/http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/heart_strings/http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/hanamuko_san/http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/shinaide_elektel/http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/ikoku_irokoi_romantan/http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/sumanai_masumi_kun/some of these have were the uke wears a girls kimono but others just have the male equivalent (i think they have a diff name but cant remember)
http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/kimi_ga_koi_ni_oboreru/prequel: http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/kimi_ga_koi_ni_ochiru/sequel: http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/kimi_ga_koi_ni_midareru/ (the uke wears a kimono a lot)
Hey I'm looking a yaoi where this guy got married to this guy but he doesn't remember. The guy, seme, turns out to be really creepy but the duke visited him in the hospital or drug and gave him candy. The seme used the candy wrappers to make this really pretty design. Btw the seme burnt the duke ex lover books.
Tanks hun. U wake up way too early
lol it's actually night time here ^^.
Can someone please help me find this manga. It is a shoujo and there are 4 friends- 2 guys and 2 girls. The blond hair guy is in love with the black hair girl but then the black hair girl is involved with an affair with a married man. The main character is a blond hair girl and she loves the blond hair guy. Later on there was a scene of her in a yataka and the black hair guy makes a move on her to annoy the blond hair guy.Confusing summary but please help me!
ok so im looking for a manga that a read quite awhile ago so i dont remember much. so im hoping someone will know what it is with the very short description i can think of. ok here it goes..its a BL. all i can remember is that the 2 boys that were a couple either ran a away for a few weeks.. or snuck away on a "vacation". but 1 of the boys told his mother that he was going away to an academic camp or something school related. but his mentally sick mother called the place that he was supposed to be at like a 100 times and they kept telling her he wasnt there but she wouldnt believe them. when the son finally returned home he thought he got away with his lie. but his mom found mud or something on his shoes and she went crazy and she tried to strangle him in his sleep but he kicked her off of him and she smacked her head on the wall and call his boyfriend thinking he killed her. thats really all i can remember if anyone know the name to this please let me know. thanks!
It sounds like this one: http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/koi_no_mannaka/
oh thank you! thats definitely the one i was thinking about :D
I actually looking for a yaoi manga that I have read like 3 years ago and I actually forgotten the title T^T... It's about 2 guys(well duh) they both have snake tattoos on the back, the seme wasa a yakuza and he had a black snake and the uke (i forgot his job) had a white snake. When the uke was pissed off he suddenly became violent and he was the cause of the seme's scar on his face. Oh maii gadd~!! I wanna read it back!! If anyone know this one please do tell me~!
http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/anohito_to_nitenai_kuchibiru/ (last chapter)
It was a couple of weeks back, I think.. but it was about 2 boys.. who didn't even look older than 12 xDWell, I didn't get to finish reading it at the time, and I forgot the title of the Manga.. so if anybody could help me, it would be much appreciated :D
Sorry, don't know how to use this site yet so I screwed up with the post. :[But yeah, it was featured in the Top 5 Yaoi Manga list a couple of weeks back
Any chance of it being this or any other works of this author? http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/kohitsuji_hokaku_keikaku/
Is it about swimwear?
the manga I am looking for is about a girl who is in love with her friends brother, during the manga he gets hurt falling off a horse or something like that, he goes blind in one eye and might lose sight in the other, not sure, the girls friend also told the brother that the girl sleep with her boyfriend (she really didn't), and they don't want anything to do with her after that, so she left, then for some reason she was put the hospital, the hospital contacted the friend and brother, with contact info they got off a necklace or something like that.....
Completed yaoi manga with submissive seme and dominant uke. Thanks in advance :*
Kathy, you are my QUEEN! Thanks :)
Kathy's everyone's queen damn it! XD
People are attracted to him and love him for his looks? He gets a lot of attention?
these have popular semes:http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/yankee_kun_to_pantsu_no_ouji_sama/http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/sukitte_iwasete/http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/ameiro_paradox/http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/gosan_no_heart/http://www.mangago.com/read-manga/darling/
Thank you very much! You taking the time to recommend these means a lot to me! :DD
Could anyone help me to give a list of manga in which seme is madly in love with uke or uke is the one who controls the relationship? Thanks a million to anyone who help!!! :)
I have a list with dominant uke if you wanna check it out:http://www.mangago.com/home/mangalist/3580/
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